Ten Quote Tuesday is a great feature on A Writer’s Path, one of my favorite blogs.  There are always writing prompts at the end and I decided to try one this week: Start out a scene with this phrase, “I refuse to close my eyes anymore.”

I refuse to close my eyes anymore.

My eyelids squeeze tighter as I make up my mind. I can’t take the dark within the darkness any longer. The unseen whispers against my skin are not going away and are no more bearable when my own lashes mimic their taunts.

I notice the drum of my heart has switched from thrash metal to techno and my breath is not choking me as it was – how long ago?

There goes my heart again.

Gathering the unraveling thread of my decision I force my lids to obey my command.

I don’t want to know it.

I can’t stay like this though.

My throat clenches as if connected by a counter weight to my eyes. My heart is back to techno but I can’t tell if my eyes are open. It’s almost like i didn’t accomplish anything.

I blink to know it’s true; the darkness beyond is as thick as I imagined.

I exhale with a vengeance and feel the air come back at my face immediately. I twist my wrist to the side and hit the barrier instantly. Point my toes; same block.

Oh shit.

There goes my heart again.


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      1. Well the first thing I thought of was having an MRI. Probably totally wrong guess. I may have been taking my cues from your title. So maybe it’s still a little vague. But I have a HORRID lack of imagination!

      2. My thought was someone buried alive…I didn’t put a lot of thought into the title though. Your interpretation does make sense when you look at that. My creative juices were running low I guess lol

  1. Loved the fact that there was something tangible going on – sometimes a lot of nicely written stuff is just internalised angst with no exterior action, but this is cool. I did have to re-read the last third (not a problem with the writing) just to confirm my initial suspicion that the person was perhaps in a coffin. I like it when I think I’m right & it’s even better when you get it confirmed in your comment above! 🙂

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